Last-Name 2
First Last-Name
Mr. Cercone
English 9, Period 5
25 January 2010
A “Call” to Action
Hook-As sirens echoed throughout Lynn Seager’s Ohio neighborhood on a hot night in July of 2002, chills tingled along her spine. She tried to focus on the sounds of crickets and owls on her walk, but she knew something was not right. Moments later her husband called with heart-wrenching news: their twin teenage daughters, Kim and Kathy, had just been killed in front of his own eyes. A man preoccupied with his cell phone conversation violently rear-ended their car as they waited for a train to pass at a rail-road crossing. The girls were killed instantly (Partnership). Background info-When drivers or passengers are on the road, as in the Seager’s tragedy, irresponsible cell phone users are putting lives at risk. Many people have witnessed drivers so distracted by dialing, texting, and chatting that they resemble drunk drivers, weaving between lanes, for example, or nearly running down pedestrians in crosswalks. A number of bills to manage the use of cell phones on the road have been introduced in state legislatures, and the time has come to push for their passage. Thesis statement-Regulation of cell phone use while driving is needed to prevent accidents and save lives.
Topic Sentence-No one can deny that cell phones have caused traffic deaths and injuries. Support #1-Cell phones were implicated in three fatal accidents in November of 2006 alone. Early in November, two-year-old Morgan Pena was killed by a driver distracted by his cell phone (Bestoff). Morgan’s mother, Patti Pena, reports that the driver “‘ran a stop sign at 45 miles per hour, broadsided my vehicle and killed Morgan as she sat in her car seat’” (qtd. in Besthoff). Support #2-A week later, corrections officer Shannon Smith, who was guarding prisoners by the side of the road, was killed by a woman distracted by a phone call (Besthoff). On Thanksgiving weekend the same month, John and Carole Hall were killed when a Naval Academy midshipman crashed into their parked car. The driver said in court that when he looked up from the cell phone he was dialing, he was three feet from the car and had no time to stop (Travisano).
Topic Sentence-Expert testimony and public opinion suggest that driving while phoning is dangerous. Support #1- Frances Bents, an expert on the relationship between cell phones and accidents, estimates that between 450 and 1,000 crashes a year have some connection to cell phone use (“Cell Phones”). In a survey published by Famers Insurance Group, 87% of those polled said that cell phones affect a driver’s ability, and 40% reported having close calls with drivers distracted by phones (Farmers Insurance). Support #2-Some passengers have even commented that when riding with a driver on the cell phone, they feel nervous because the driver swerves, appears to ignore or not observe other drivers, and is inconsistent with his speed (Travisano). These same impairments are reminiscent of a drunk driver’s symptoms.
Topic Sentence-Despite the claims of some lobbyists, tough laws regulating phone use can make roads safer. Support #1-In Japan, for example, accidents linked to cell phones fell by 75% just a month after the country prohibited using a handheld phone while driving (Ewers). Support #2-Research suggests and common sense dictates that it is not possible to drive an automobile at high speeds, dial numbers, and carry on a conversation without significant risks. When such behavior is regulated, obviously the roads will be safer.
Restate thesis- Because of the mounting public awareness of the dangers of drivers distracted by phones, state legislators must begin to take the problem seriously. “‘It’s definitely an issue that is gaining steam across the country,’” says Matt Sundeen of the National Conference of State Legislatures (qtd. in “Cell Phones”). Lon Anderson of the American Automobile Association agrees: ‘“There is momentum building to pass laws,”’ (qtd. in “Cell Phones”). Call for action-The time has come for states to adopt legislation restricting the use of cell phones in moving vehicles.