Ankrom comments:
Needs title, affiliation, abstract, acknowledgements, page numbers, etc.
Scholarly writing uses scholarly references – scholarship is not polemic. You MUST find scholarly work to cite related to your claims to set them into context with the field. See my earlier emails for some possible scholarly refs, please cite them in APA format.
Start your paper with some discussion of other published scholarly work;ay a foundation of published fact
Then move on to your won experiences.
Definitely cite my paper on the Buff State Alt Cert program; it's a key cite to your paper.
You need to tighten up your paper a great deal at the start you need to be succinct about your writing. Fix your use of apostophes (it's is a contraction). Capitalization on Buffalo State. Avoid being seen as an economic refugee – watch capitalization on physics.
Cite NYSED regents website,and the sites dealing with LAST and CST
A citation on the role of mentoring might be appropriate as well as one on teaching salaries.
Nice comment of learning physics content. And on the point that you hadn't expected to. Did you learn content in your MSEd courses as well?
Homonyms weather # whether; principal # principle;
Classroom management issues and disciplinary issues arose. Avoiding public confrontation with audience and performance issues for private (see me in the hall) treatment. Citations would be appropriate.
Looking at literature on why teachers leave the profession (administrivia, student attitude, teacher pay, classroom management and discipline) and citing that material would greatly improve your paper.
Also, can you boil the end down to a few words of comment on your experiences (would you take this route again, what worked and what didn't) and advice for a similar person (an engineer thinking about changing professions to teaching)? That'd be a great ending.
But you need citations to references most of all.
Dan MacIsaac