London Elementary School (Week _8__)

Skill: Language – Editing Skills

Subject: Writing Grade: 5

This test section contains TWELVE multiple-choice and ONE open-response (short-answer) questions. Please mark your answers for the multiple-choice questions in the spaces provided on your Student Response Booklet. Mark only one answer for each question. If you do not know the answer, make your best guess. DO NOT WRITE ANY ANSWERS IN THIS TEST BOOKLET. WHEN YOU FINISH, DO NOT WORK ON ANY OTHER TEST SECTION.

Noises in the Night

1. Daylight is long gone and the mist rises from the dark earth and the forest is black.

2. Tonight there is not even a ray of moonlight.

3. Most people are asleep on this mid-July night. But Carol is wide awake she hears

strange noises coming from the dark forest. she looks over at her sister Jackie

sleeping soundly in a warm sleeping bag. Has Jackie heared anything.

4. Carol quietly slips out of her own sleeping bag and lifts the flap that covers the tent’s

opening and peeks outside. The trees, bushes, and darkness is all she sees.

5. “Kathy” yells Carol “Do you hear something strange.”?

6. No! replied Kathy. Leave me along, “I need to sleep.”

7. Carol was puzzled. What were those sounds she had heard only a few moments

ago?

8. Suddenly an animal’s cry cut through the darkness. Then silence returned. But was

quiet for only a few seconds.

9. Carol’s ears picked up more sounds.

10. She heard rustling leaves, snapping branches, wings beating against the night air.

11. Carol sat quietly in the tent door, listening to the different forest sounds.

12. She couldn’t see the animals around her. But their sounds caused her to make

pictures in her mind.

13. She imagines animals hunting for their food. She can picture them racing softly

across the forest floor. Could some of those noises be birds flying among the trees?

14. Carol is so frightened and she just closes the flap of the tent and crawls back into her

sleeping bag beside kathy.

15. Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. Are you asleep Carol? She asks. Carol just

looks at Kathy and says “yes!”

1. / Which is the best way to rewrite # 1 to prevent the sentence from being a run-on sentence?
O / A. / Daylight is long gone and the mist rises from the dark earth. The forest is black.
O / B. / Daylight is long gone. The mist rises from the dark earth. The forest is black.
O / C. / Daylight is long gone. The mist rises from the dark earth, and the forest is black.
O / D. / Daylight is long gone, mist rises from the dark earth and the forest is black.
2. / In # 3, what editing needs to be changed to make the sentences correct?
O / A. / A capital letter and commas
O / B. / A comma
O / C. / A capital letter and a punctuation mark
O / D. / A capital letter, punctuation mark, and commas
3. / Which word needs to be substituted for the underlined word? The trees, bushes, and darkness is all she sees.
O / A. / are
O / B. / was
O / C. / were
O / D. / can
4. / Which of the following sentences is written correctly?
O / A. / No! replied Kathy. Leave me along, “I need to sleep.”
O / B. / “No!” replied Kathy. “Leave me along, I need to sleep.”
O / C. / “No!” replied Kathy. Leave me along, “I need to sleep.”
O / D. / “No”! replied Kathy. “Leave me along,” “I need to sleep.”
5. / What is wrong with this sentence? Has Jackie heared anything?
O / A. / subject - verb agreement
O / B. / verb tense
O / C. / capitalization
O / D. / end punctuation
6. / Which of the following sentences is missing a conjunction?
O / A. / She heard rustling leaves, snapping branches, wings beating against the night air.
O / B. / “Kathy” yells Carol “Do you hear something strange.”?
O / C. / She imagines animals hunting for their food. She can picture them racing softly across the forest floor. Could some of those noises be birds flying among the trees?
O / D. / Daylight is long gone and the mist rises from the dark earth and the forest is black.
7. / Which sentence is written incorrectly?
O / A. / Carol’s ears picked up more sounds.
O / B. / Carol was puzzled. What were those sounds she had heard only a few moments ago?
O / C. / Carol is so frightened and she just closes the flap of the tent and crawls back into her sleeping bag beside kathy.
O / D. / Tonight there is not even a ray of moonlight.
8. / Where should the quotation mark go in this sentence?
Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. Are you asleep Carol? She asks. Carol just
looks at Kathy and says “yes!”
O / A. / Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. Are you asleep Carol? she asks. Carol just looks at Kathy and says “yes”!
O / B. / Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. Are you asleep Carol? she asks. Carol just looks at Kathy and says yes!
O / C. / Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. “Are you asleep Carol”? she asks. Carol just looks at Kathy and says “yes!”
O / D. / Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. “Are you asleep Carol?” she asks. Carol just looks at Kathy and says “yes!”

Annotated Rubric/ Performance Expectations for ORQ

Academic Expectation: 1.11

Core Content: WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by

• Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience

Essential Vocabulary:

Effective language

Grammar & Usage

Verbs

Nouns

Concrete details

Sensory details

Content

Resources/Technology:

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http://www.teachers.net/lessons/posts/23...

http://www.uottawa.ca/academic/arts/writ...

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Grade 5 -- Writing
Question / First
A.E. / First CC / Sec-ond A.E. / Sec-ond CC / DOK
Level of MC Question / Answer
Key / Rational/Annotation for MC Questions
1 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / A / Answer A has combined two of the choppy sentences to make one more advanced sentence and one smaller sentence. Answer B has three short choppy sentences. In answer C there is a comma that should not be there. Answer D also has an unneeded comma and the sentence is too long and unclear.
2 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / D / There needs to be a capital letter to begin the second sentence (She). There also needs to be a punctuation mark change from a period to a question mark at the end of the last sentence. A comma should be placed in front of and behind the name Jackie to separate it from the rest of the sentence.
3 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / A / Are is the correct answer. There are three simple subjects-trees, bushes, and darkness. The other choices do not have subject verb agreement.
4 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / B / “No!” replied Kathy. “Leave me along, I need to sleep.” is the correct answer. All of the other choices were either missing or misused commas or quotation marks.
5 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / B / The word heared is not the correct verb tense to use. The word heared is not a word. The correct tense should have been heard.
6 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / A / She heard rustling leaves, snapping branches, wings beating against the night air. is the correct answer. A conjunction is used to separate a series. There should have been the word and after the last comma.
7 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / C / The sentence Carol is so frightened and she just closes the flap of the tent and crawls back into her sleeping bag beside kathy is written incorrectly. This is a run-on sentence and the Kathy is a proper noun that should be capitalized.
8 / 1.11 / WR-E-3.5.0 Language: Students will exemplify effective language choices by - Applying correct grammar and usage ; Applying concise use of language; Incorporating strong verbs, precise nouns, concrete details, and sensory details; Applying language appropriate to the content, purpose, and audience / DOK Ceiling Level / 2 / D / Kathy wakes up and turns toward Carol. “Are you asleep Carol?” she asks. Carol just looks at Kathy and says “yes!” is the correct answer. The punctuation marks are supposed to be inside the quotation marks.

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