Name: ______Date: ______Period: ______

Kino Essay Editing

Self-Editing Activity

  1. The following words cannot be used in your essay: ran, went, said, and threw.

Did you change past tense words to present tense words?

YES NO

  1. The following words cannot be used in your essay: can’t, won’t, hasn’t.

Did you take out all the contractions?

YES NO

  1. The following words cannot be used in your essay: me, my, mine, I, we, us, you, your.

Did you take out any first or second person pronouns?

YESNO

  1. If the essay is typed, do you have accurate heading and spacing? If hand written, it is in pen?

YES NO

  1. Write the title of the essay here: ______

Is the first letter of every word (except for little words) Capitalized?

YES NO

  1. Did you remember to underlineThe Pearland include John Steinbeck in the introductory paragraph?

YES NO

  1. Does your THESIS STATEMENT have the following word: change?

YES NO

  1. Does your TOPIC SENTENCE for Body #1say a trait for Kino at the beginning?

YES NO

  1. Does your TOPIC SENTENCE for Body #2say a trait for Kino after he changes?

YES NO

  1. Do you have 2 quotations (concrete details)in your body paragraph?

YES NO

  1. Did make sure your quotations (concrete details) look something like this: (Steinbeck86)? YES NO
  2. Did you blend all of your quotations?

YES NO

  1. How many sentences of commentarydo you have? ______Is it 4 sentences or more?

YES NO

  1. Review the Rubric. Will your essay get the scores that you highlighted?

YES NO

If the answer was NO to any question, fix it on your essay.Then, circle YES in a different color pen or pencil.

Look at the rubric you highlighted at the front of your final essay. Pick one area (ie. Concrete details, thesis statement, formal style, etc.) that you highlighted.

  1. What was one of the words/skills you highlighted on the rubric? ______
  2. How do you know you got proficient or advanced on this part of the rubric? Be specific and give two reasons why.
  3. ______
  4. ______

Complete the following chart by checking a Y (yes) or an N (no) for each statement. Fix any N’s you found.

Thesis: / Y / N
Does the thesis statement address the prompt about characterization of a dynamic character?
Body Paragraph: / Y / N
Does the topic sentence begin with a correct transition word or phrase?
Does the body paragraph have a topic sentence with a clear key idea?
Does Concrete Detail (CD) #1 have a transition word or phrase?
Is CD #1 blended (lead-in) with adequate context provided?
Is selected CD #1 word for word from the text?
Does CD #1 have proper parenthetical documentation?
Is the Commentary that follows CD #1 free of flaws?
If not, circle which flaws are present: stray obvious personal question speculation
Is there at least two sentences of Commentary that follow CD #1?
Does the Commentary explain how the quote proves the key idea?
Does CD #2 have a transition word or phrase?
Is CD #2 blended with adequate context provided?
Is selected CD #2 word for word from the text?
Does CD #2 have proper parenthetical documentation?
Is the Commentary that follows CD #2 free of flaws?
If not, circle which flaws are present: stray obvious personal question speculation
Is there a counterargument after CD #2 that addresses the other side and refutes it?
Is there at least two sentences of Commentary that follow CD #2?
Does the Commentary explain how the quote proves the key idea?
Is the body paragraph a minimum of eight sentences in length?
Does the body paragraph have a concluding sentence?
Does the concluding sentence have a transition?
Formatting and Conventions: / Y / N
Does the writer stay in third person (no I, me, we, us, you, your)?
Does the writer use no contractions, dead words, or slang?
Are there no errors in capitalization, usage, punctuation, spelling, and tense?