TOEFL Score Report
성 명 : 설진호
시 험 일 자 : 2005. 2.11
1. TOEFL Score
Section 1 / Section 2 / Section 3 / 예상점수19 / 20 / 21 / 200
2. TWE Score: 4.5/6.0
3. Paper Based 환산 점수: 533
All countries have its own music, because of their specific culture. Music reflects cultures and societies. In Korea, there are many kinds of musics and they reflects their ages.
In Cho-sun dynasity, there was the 'Chang' which was a kind of Korea traditional musics. In that age, people had a grudge, because they could not speak freely and many things were stopped by the power of dynasity. So people made a song which reflects their life. They expressed their emotions by singing.
In70's, there was many songs against the dictatorship. These songs were forbidden , so people made their lyrics indirectly. Of course, all people who loved freedom knew about their pristine meanings.
Music give us encouragement and hope even though they cannot express directly. It's one way of express the cultures and societies in some ages.
All countries have itstheir own music, because of their specific culture. Music thus reflects cultures and societies. In Korea, there are many kinds of musics, such as [list], and they each reflects their own ages of origin.
Your introduction has set up the topic, but it is too vague; you need to list the kinds of music you will describe.
Back Iin the Cho-sun dynasitydynasty, there was the 'Cchang',which was a traditional kind of Koreantraditional musics. In that age, people had a grudge, because they could not speak freely and many things were stoppedsuppressed by the power of the dynasitydynasty. So people made a songs which reflectsreflected their lifelives. They expressed their emotions by singing.
This body paragraph explains where this kind of music originated. When using non-English words, put them in italic font but don’t use a capital unless it is a proper noun (Chosun is, chang is not).
Moving forward toIn70's the 1970s, there waswere many songs against the dictatorship. TheseSuch songs were forbidden, , so people madeexpressedtheirthemselveslyrics indirectly through the lyrics. Of course, all people who loved freedom knew about their pristineunderlying meanings.
This paragraph provides an excellent insight into a rarely described form of music. Normally you could just say the 70s, but since your previous paragraph was speaking of earlier centuries, you have to make it clear that you have moved to the 20th century.
Music gives us encouragement and hope even thoughwhentheywe cannot express our frustrations directly. It's one way of expressing the cultures and societiessociety in some ages. The folk music of the Chosun era and pop of the 70s share these characteristics in Korea.
Your conclusion wraps up your essay, but needs to incorporate more specific details.
< Assessment >
ABCDF
High Grade Low Grade
CONTENT
Proper usage of details / ASyntactic variety &
Relevance of word choice / B
Conclusion / B
In the Next Essay:
(Comments) / You have put good details in the body of your paragraph, but need to include them briefly in your introduction and conclusion.
ORGANIZATION
General organization
/ CTransitional expressions / B
Coherence / A
In the Next Essay:
(Comments) / You need to use transitional expressions to indicate the relationship between your paragraphs.
GRAMMAR AND SCORE
Specific weak points in grammarScore / 4.5 / 6.0
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