Synthesis Revisions

Synthesis Revisions

Your assignment: Pick one paragraph from the recent synthesis essay you wrote and revise that paragraph. Consider picking a paragraph that included underdeveloped connections between sources and your thesis , awkward or vague language or lacked analysis and exploration of the topic. Revisions will be scored using the following scale.

TOTAL: ______

Effective / Adequate / Inadequate
9-10 pts
The revisions show that the writer understood which concepts needed to be further explored and clarified. / 8 pts
The revisions show that the writer made attempts to further explore concepts and clarify their understanding of concepts. At times clarification was achieved but the reader continues to have questions about a writer’s argument and supporting evidence. / 7 and below
The write made little attempt to revise writing. The writer did not further explore concepts and clarify their understanding. If the writer did make an attempt to revise writing, they did not do so in an effective manner and the reader remains confused or has questions about the writer’s argument.
5 pts
The revisions include improved word choice and sentence structure. / 4 pts
The revisions include some improved word choice and effective changes to sentence structure. At times language remains generic or vague. / 3 and below
The writer did little to improve word choice or make necessary changes to sentence structure. The language remains inadequate as it does not clarify the writer’s argument.
9-10 pts
The revisions allow for the reader to have a deeper understanding of the writer’s argument. The revisions show the writer created a more complex argument that identifies the challenges of the subject. / 8 pts
The writer attempts to make revisions that allow for a deeper understanding of the writer’s argument but at times the revisions do not always clarify the writer’s argument or show a deeper understanding of the subject. / 7 and below
The writer does not revise to show a deeper understanding of their argument. The writer’s argument remains inadequate in development and complexity.

Synthesis Revisions

Your assignment: Pick one paragraph from the recent synthesis essay you wrote and revise that paragraph. Consider picking a paragraph that included underdeveloped connections between sources and your thesis , awkward or vague language or lacked analysis and exploration of the topic. Revisions will be scored using the following scale.

TOTAL: ______

Effective / Adequate / Inadequate
9-10 pts
The revisions show that the writer understood which concepts needed to be further explored and clarified. / 8 pts
The revisions show that the writer made attempts to further explore concepts and clarify their understanding of concepts. At times clarification was achieved but the reader continues to have questions about a writer’s argument and supporting evidence. / 7 and below
The write made little attempt to revise writing. The writer did not further explore concepts and clarify their understanding. If the writer did make an attempt to revise writing, they did not do so in an effective manner and the reader remains confused or has questions about the writer’s argument.
5 pts
The revisions include improved word choice and sentence structure. / 4 pts
The revisions include some improved word choice and effective changes to sentence structure. At times language remains generic or vague. / 3 and below
The writer did little to improve word choice or make necessary changes to sentence structure. The language remains inadequate as it does not clarify the writer’s argument.
9-10 pts
The revisions allow for the reader to have a deeper understanding of the writer’s argument. The revisions show the writer created a more complex argument that identifies the challenges of the subject. / 8 pts
The writer attempts to make revisions that allow for a deeper understanding of the writer’s argument but at times the revisions do not always clarify the writer’s argument or show a deeper understanding of the subject. / 7 and below
The writer does not revise to show a deeper understanding of their argument. The writer’s argument remains inadequate in development and complexity.