Practice Style Test – 2700 – IF YOU THINK THERE MIGHT BE MORE THAN ONE WAY TO REWRITE A SENTENCE, CONSULT ME.

Rewrite these sentences to put the action in the verb.

a.  Failure to follow the above instructions will be the basis for the rejection of our proposal.

b.  Consideration should be given to an acquisition of the properties.

c.  Our expectation was to begin the new project immediately.

d.  The police are conducting an investigation of the armed robbery that occurred this morning.

Rewrite these sentences to put the more important information and technical terms near the end of the sentence.

a.  Water pipes in many older homes will freeze and possibly burst under these weather conditions.

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b.  Myosin and Actin are tiny filaments inside your muscle.

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c.  The cornea copes well with minor injuries. If dirt scratches the cornea, epithelial cells slide over it, patching the injury before infection, for example.

For each sentence listed below, do the following: Identify the principle and principles that the writer has not followed and then rewrite the sentences correctly.

a.  Because of the clerk’s inability to help us with the equipment, there was a delay in the repairs that we had to do the next day.

b.  We reviewed the drawings and found numerous errors upon receipt of the drawings.

c.  A reinvestigation of the new employee’s travel expenses by the accounting division is necessary before reimbursement from headquarters can be provided.

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d.  There has been a decrease in the number of infants killed because of airbags.

Underline the old information in the passage and rewrite the passage such that old information appears at the beginning of the sentence.

Insect repellents are available in various forms and concentrations. Aerosol and pump-spray products are intended for skin applications as well as for treating clothing. Liquid, cream, lotion, and stick products enable direct skin application. Products with a low concentration of the active ingredients may be appropriate for situations where exposure to insects is minimal. A higher concentration of the active ingredient may be useful in highly infested areas, or with insect species that are more difficult to repel. And, where appropriate, consider nonchemical ways to deter biting insects – screens, netting, long sleeves, and slacks.

(3) Direct skin application is enabled with liquid, cream……………..

(4) Low concentration of the active ingredient…….

(5) Active ingredients with a higher concentration may be useful….

(6) Consider using nonchemical ways to deter……

Rewrite these sentences to make the actor the subject.

a.  Working together will ultimately finish the new product design on time.

b.  There is no alternative for us except to withdraw the product.

Rewrite these sentences substituting specific language for vague language.

a.  Our analysis of the drinking water revealed a number of items that we can consider.

Rewrite these sentences to eliminate misplaced modifiers.

a.  The study suggests that we should continue the recycling program to the city and the council.

b.  The technician banged angrily on the flashlight in the laboratory that was dimly lighted.

Rewrite these sentences to eliminate stacked nouns.

a.  The protocol changes list states that investigation modifications occurred after the study enrollment period.

b.  NEI-supported scientists recently developed a culturing rabbit cornea tissue method that allows researchers to measure cell movement.

Get rid of unnecessary wordings.

a.  There are several scientists who are uneasy about the research results.

b.  It is important that we turn in our application by the deadline.

c.  The majority of the candidates supports the tax rollback but has not taken into consideration the cost to education and social programs.

d.  It is interesting to note that at the conclusion of the council meeting; most of the opponents of the new tax policy were gone.

Change negative constructions into positive constructions in the sentence.

a.  Not many of the competitors finished the marathon because of the extreme heat and humidity.

b.  Even though the plane was delayed because of fog, we were not late to the conference.