Lok Wah Catholic Primary School

LokWahCatholicPrimary School

2007-2008 (Term 1)

From reading to writing

1. Show and go through a passage from WELS together with Ss.
2. Highlight the useful vocabulary and phrases to Ss.
3. Revisit the vocabulary and phrases taught in Ch. 3 & 4 with Ss.
4. Play a web game from WELS.

1. Review the features of a complaint letter by using word strips.
2. Revisit the organizer by using textbook.
3. Show a student’s writing and make comparison with the sample on p. 23 of the textbook.
4. Discuss with Ss on the elements needed to be included in a letter of complaint.

1. Generate a set of simple rubrics with Ss.
2. Group writing (short writing)
3. Have Ss share their work and class evaluation of the rubrics.

1. Revisit the rubrics set in the previous lesson.
2. Individual writing

Writing assessment and evaluation rubrics

Content

1) The topic sentence is clear stated.

I am writing to complain that there is _____ pollution near our school.

2) Fully developed idea of pollution

Cause:

The pile drivers and roadwork in your school’s construction site produce too much noise.

Result:

We do not have a quiet environment to study. If you do not stop causing noise pollution, we will go deaf.

Solution:

You should set the working hours after 3:00 p.m. or on Saturdays.

3) The description is presented clearly.

4) Provided information in details.

Organization

1) Give introduction, body and conclusion

Introduction:

I am writing to complain that there is _____ pollution near our school.

Body:

The pile drivers and roadwork in your school’s construction site produce too much noise. So, we do not have a quiet environment to study. If you do not stop causing noise pollution, we will go deaf.You should set the working hours after 3:00 p.m. or on Saturdays.

Conclusion:

I hope you can do something to improve the situation.

OR

Could you please do something about the pollution near our school?

2) Give paragraphs and used transition words

(e.g. First,Next, Then, After that, Finally)

Grammar

1) The writing is free of spellings mistakes.

2) Sentences are punctuated correctly.

3) Uses a wide range of cohesive devices

(e.g. and, but, although, so)

The pile drivers and roadwork in your school’s construction site produce too much noise.So, we do not have a quiet environment to study.

Format

1)Complaint letter format included:

Date

1 September 2007

Receiver

Dear Principal Lam,

Title

Pollution near our school

Opening

I am writing to complain that ……

Closing

Yours sincerely,

Sender

Cheung sum sum

A student from Lok Wah

CatholicPrimary School

Tone

I hope you can do something to improve the situation.

OR

Could you please do something about the pollution near our school?

LokWahCatholicPrimary School

2007 – 2008 (First Term)

P. 6 Writing Task

A letter of complaint (Group Writing)

There is a construction site beside our school. It is FukienSecondary School’s new swimming pool. However, it is causing pollution to us. Write a letter to the school to complain.

LokWahCatholicPrimary School

2007 – 2008 (First Term)

P. 6 Writing Task

A letter of complaint (Individual Writing)

The buses around Charlie Wong’s school are causing a lot of pollution. Charlie wants to write to the bus company to complain. Help Charlie finish the letter.