I Hate BAD Paragraphs
Read the paragraphs below and use your revision strategy with the each.
1. Hatred has and can spread in many ways. Hatred can be shown by the actions of others complaints of the others. Hatred is also spread before the fight too. It’s spread by rumors form on lookers of the people who are going to fight.
2.Hatred has connected to me on how people react to others in the hallways of school. Also, at home in the neighborhood as well on how people like each other.
3.I think disrespecting others to make someone feel good causes hate. People talk down on others. They do this because they might be more upper-class. Some people do this because they are jealous. People don’t think before they act.
4.I agree that fights are spread. Because hatred does bad things to peoples mind. People get involved because they have to be there to back-up their friends. Lots of people get peer pressure. People get very self involved with their friends.
5. People aim hatred at unknown people to hide their insecurity with “courage”. Fitting in with something you truly don’t believe in for the sake of fitting in is always false representation. Some think it is cool to pick onones they don’t know. There is no other sensibleexplanation for hatred towards the unknown.
Now use the questions you wrote on the front for the actual revision. Make sure to use your editing marks when necessary and focus only on revision.
1. Hatred has and can spread in many ways. Hatred can be shown by the actions of others complaints of the others. Hatred is also spread before the fight too. It’s spread by rumors form on lookers of the people who are going to fight.
2.Hatred has connected to me on how people react to others in the hallways of school. Also, at home in the neighborhood as well on how people like each other.
3.I think disrespecting others to make someone feel good causes hate. People talk down on others. They do this because they might be more upper-class. Some people do this because they are jealous. People don’t think before they act.
4.I agree that fights are spread. Because hatred does bad things to peoples mind. People get involved because they have to be there to back-up their friends. Lots of people get peer pressure. People get very self involved with their friends.
5. People aim hatred at unknown people to hide their insecurity with “courage”. Fitting in with something you truly don’t believe in for the sake of fitting in is always false representation. Some think it is cool to pick on ones they don’t know. There is no other sensible explanation for hatred towards the unknown.