English 60 Professor Parks
English 60 * Writing Express part 2
Ms. Parks- professor
SPRING 2011
Questionnaire name ______
1. What high school did you attend? When did you graduate?
2. What is your career goal?
3. What ACDV classes (if any) have you taken?
4. What classes are you taking now?
5. What is the hardest thing about writing?
6. What is the best English class you’ve ever taken? Why?
(Answer in at least five complete sentences.)
Name ______
Introduce yourself to your classmates and find people who
….weren’t born in Bakersfield. ..went somewhere over vacation.
1.1.
2.2.
3.3.
…….have a job.…play an instrument.
1.1.
2.2.
3.3.
….have a pet...have siblings or children.
1.1.
2.2.
3.3.
What are your impressions of this class (the students, teacher, and subject matter)? What are your expectations?
(OCE # 1) Outline for argument essay with response to opposition
Paragraph # 1
Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2
*Topic sentence:
example or detail
paragraph # 3 (response to the opposition)
*Topic sentence: Some say ...... , but……..
explain why you are right
Practice peer edit, first draft
By Josie Anderson
Some athletes with prosthetic legs have asked to be allowed to compete with other athletes in the Olympics. While some people may see this as a signal that these athletes are as good as others, this move could give these athletes an advantage. So, athletes with artificial legs should not be allowed to compete in college, national, and international competitions.
Some argue that it would show those athletes that they are accepted, thus boosting their self esteem. As they grow, they would feel that no doors were closed to them. They would know that they could achieve anything in a career realm as well as in the professional sports realm. But, they would not be competing on a level field. Prosthetic legs have improved, and the athletes could have an advantage. Prosthetic legs are becoming more light weight and with more spring. Conceivably, they would be able to jump higher, push off stronger, and run faster. This would not be fair.
If athletes with prosthetic legs were allowed to compete in the Olympics, where would this end? Would athletes in wheelchairs want to be part of the National Basketball Association? They could plow down another player with their chair. A boxer with a prosthetic arm and hand would have an unfair advantage with a hard hand that never got tired. In baseball a player with a prosthetic arm could throw a faster pitch and possibly hit more homeruns. These are unfair situations that should not be considered. So the line needs to be drawn to keep those with prosthetic limbs in a different league.
Athletes with artificial limbs can, and should, feel good about what they can accomplish in every field. They have wonderful role models and have broken down many barriers. But athletes with prosthetics and those with real limbs need to compete in different college and professional sporting categories. Now, what they do at the playground on the weekend is up to them.
Writer ______Reader ______
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
3 – excellent 2- OK 1- weak
score
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
Is the strongest point last?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details and examples
to back up his/her opinion?
Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Practice peer edit, first draft
By Miranda Lewis
At a high school football game, students cheer for their team, dressing up in their school colors and wearing items associated with their mascot. If their mascot is a Brave, a Warrior, a Redskin, or an Apache, students might dress up in red war paint, wear a feathered headband, and carry a tamahawk. While they are indeed supporting their team, they are, perhaps unintentionally, making fun of Native Americans. Many of the mascots have exaggerated clownish features and red skin. High schools should not use ethnic mascots. They are demeaning and send the signal that making fun of someone’s ethnicity is okay.
Some argue that ethnic mascots are in good fun and that people are being overly sensitive. But if people weren’t so prejudiced, they would realize that America has made fun of Native Americans for so long that it is taken for granted. We have seen them in cartoons and in movies as violent or unable to utter a word except “how.” They deserve more respect; Europeans took this country from them, killed them with their diseases, and put them on reservations. America turned them into a caricature. They are real people. One problem is many people don’t know real Native Americans to counter the cartoon the media has fed us.
Some argue that it would be expensive to change the school mascot. But if the mascot was your ethnicity, then you would want to change it. No one would allow the Orlando Orientals, who had squinty eyes, or the Washington Wetbacks, who drove around in low riders. Imagine the Nebraska Negroes, who ate watermelon. Each of the above ethnicities would be up in arms, and no one would blame them. We have made fun of Native Americans so long that it is part of our culture.
No matter the cost, this should not be permitted in high school sports. As teams buy new uniforms, replace helmets, and paint the gym, the change can take place. Allowing ethnic mascots teaches our youngsters that it is okay to make fun of Native Americans. This attitude only continues as they grow older and spreads to their treatment of other cultures.
Writer ______Reader ______
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
3 – excellent 2- OK 1- weak
score
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
Is the strongest point last?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details and examples
to back up his/her opinion?
Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Writing assignments
services assignment
Identify a service on campus. Choose from the following: library, child care center, health and wellness center, counseling, supportive services, tutoring, student government association, financial aid,and job placement.
Visit the place. Ask what services they provide, their hours (drop in, make an appointment), how to qualify for their services (testing, application, etc.), whether they offer classes, what the cost is, etc. You may go in groups and share information.
In your paper, describe the place inside and where it is (what building, what part of campus), describe the services they provide, and how you can use their services.
length: one page typed
outline for services assignment
Thesis statement:
1. where you visited and what it looks like
2. what services they provide
3. how you can benefit from their services
peer review of outline of student services assignment
writer's name ______
reader's name ______
1. Does the writer have a thesis statement that includes where he/she went and how he/she can benefit from the service?
2. Does the writer have description of where he/she visited and where it is located?
3. Does the writer have information on what services are provided?
4. Does the writer have information on how he/she can benefit from the service?
5. Any suggestions for the writer?
peer review of outline of student services assignment
writer's name ______
reader's name ______
1. Does the writer have a thesis statement that includes where he/she went and how he/she can benefit from the service?
2. Does the writer have description of where he/she visited and where it is located?
3. Does the writer have information on what services are provided?
4. Does the writer have information on how he/she can benefit from the service?
5. Any suggestions for the writer?
grade sheet for services assignment
A
identifies a service
provides details on what the office provides
describes the location of the office
explains how the student will use those services
organized with transitions
one page in length
few grammar errors
B
identifies a service
provides some details on what the office provides
touches on how the student will use the services
organized
one page in length
some grammar errors that don't interfere with meaning
C
identifies a service
provides a few details on what the office provides
a few details on how the student will use the services
almost a page in length
grammar errors that interfere with meaning
D
identifies a service
provides few details on what the office provides
not clear how the student will use the services
less than a page in length
many grammar errors
Portfolio project on The Pact
Further instructions will be given in class. The portfolio project will consist of the following:
1. seven journal questions
2. reflection essay
3. movie reaction
1. journal questions on The Pact
Length: one to 1 1/2 page typed each
1. Read chapters 1 - 3 in The Pact. Even though all three of the guys were poor and didn't grow up with both parents, all of them could identify a family member or neighbor or teacher or friend's father who made a difference. Take the authors and discuss who inspired him. What did those people have in common? Who inspires you and what does that person have in common with the authors' people?
2. a. The authors write about friends in chapters 4-7 (pages 59-110). What do you think about the choices they made in friendships and with their friends? You may focus on one or two of the authors, if you like. What do you notice about your friendships and how they have influenced you?
OR
b. The authors write about getting in trouble and learning a lesson. How was that a defining moment for them? Have you had any such moment(s)?
3. Read "The Pursuit of Just Getting By" p. 268 in AN. Compare Amy Widner's ideas with those in chapters 4 -7 (pg. 59-110) of The Pact. What have you seen and heard at your school. What are your ideas on just getting by?
4. Read "Protest is Dead. Long Live Protest" pg. 303 in AN. Compare Joseph Hart's ideas with those in chapters 4-7 (pg. 59-110) of The Pact where they advocate for classes on African-American and Hispanic history. What are your ideas on protest or political engagement?
5. Read chapters 8-12 (pages 11-167) in The Pact. The authors adjust to college life. What do they have to overcome (psychologically, socially, culturally, etc)? How can you identify with their transitions?
6. Read "Class Struggle is Race Struggle in U.S." p. 338 in AN. Compare Robert Reece's ideas with those in chapters 13 -16 (pages 169-224) in The Pact. What are your thoughts on racism?
7. Read chapters 17 through the epilogue (pages 225- 254) in The Pact. What piece of advice from the epilogue resonates the most with you and why?
2. Reflection essay
length: at least 1 1/2 pages typed
Write an essay reflecting on how you are different or think differently in any area after having read The Pact. This is not a summary. This is about you. This essay should be a
3. Movie reaction
length: at least one page typed
After having watched the movie shown in class on The Pact, write what the movie added to your understanding of the book or the characters or the setting.
Assignment for OCE #1: social networking
argumentative essay with example
Write an argumentative essay of at least 250 words. Your essay should have an introduction, two body paragraphs, and a conclusion. Note on your assignment sheet due dates for the first draft/peer editing, conference where your second draft is due, and final draft.
You are required to respond to use an example from the reading and an example from your life.
Choose one topic:
1. Do you think something is lost when people spend so much time of their interpersonal communication time online? Some say that people don't learn how to read cues, such reading body language and intonations. Others say technology improves our communication.
2. Is privacy taken seriously in the arena of social networking? What privacies are important? Which aren't? How do we safeguard the ones we value? Some people feel very comfortable displaying photos and daily updates of their lives for all their "friends" to see. Others worry about potential repercussions from perspective employers or colleges.
OCE # 1) Outline for argument essay with evidence
Paragraph # 1
Introduction
*thesis statement:
paragraph # 2
*Topic sentence:
example or detail
paragraph # 3
*Topic sentence:
Conclusion
summary of points plus
peer review of outline of social networking assignment
writer's name ______
reader's name ______
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to either the question about interpersonal communication and technology or about privacy and technology?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from an AN article or a personal example? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from an AN article or a personal example? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
peer review of outline of social networking assignment
writer's name ______
reader's name ______
1. Does the writer have a thesis that responds to either the question about interpersonal communication and technology or about privacy and technology?
2. Does paragraph 2 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
3. Does paragraph 2 include evidence from an AN article or a personal example? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
4. 2. Does paragraph 3 have a topic sentence? Is it a reason that backs up the thesis?
5. Does paragraph 3 include evidence from an AN article or a personal example? Does it seem to fit the topic sentence?
6. What suggestions do you have for the writer?
Writer ______Reader ______
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
3 – excellent 2- OK 1- weak
score
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
Is the strongest point last?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details and examples
to back up his/her opinion?
Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
Writer ______Reader ______
peer feedback sheet for argument writing first draft
3 – excellent 2- OK 1- weak
score
Is the thesis/opinion stated in one clear sentence?
Is the strongest point last?
Does each paragraph contain only one idea?
Does the writer include enough details and examples
to back up his/her opinion?
Is one of the points an answer to the opposition?
Does the conclusion sum up the argument?
How would you rate the strength of the argument?
My top two suggestions to improve this paper:
1.
2.
Words, phrases, or ideas I like best:
1.
2.
conference sheet
SECOND DRAFT : Social Networking
1. What comments did you receive on your first draft?
2. What changes did you make?
3. What specific questions do you have on your second draft? (introduction, conclusion, how to develop your ideas, how to respond to the other side, punctuation, fragments, run-ons, etc.)
Grade sheet for argument essay (100 points)
A Excellent organization and development, errors aren’t noticeable ______
introductory paragraph includes a clear thesis statement
each paragraph has one idea, one refers to text
essay is insightful and interesting, makes a strong argument
paragraphs are developed with sufficient examples, details
paragraphs are organized
transition words connect ideas
point of view is consistent
conclusion predicts, expands
virtually free of sentence level errors (frags, run-ons)
virtually free of verb errors (tense and agreement)
virtually free of awkward sentences
uses a variety of sentence types successfully
above average control of mechanics (punctuation, apostrophes)
above average control of diction (word choice)
very few spelling errors
BGood organization and development, errors are barely noticeable ______
introductory paragraph has a thesis statement
each paragraph has one idea, one refers to text