In the following, you’ll need to break up paragraphs that have distinctly different topics, add headings (8 second-level headings, 2 third-level headings (run-in), and follow the italicized directions carefully.
You are Marissa Alexandria, Research Technician. Your adress is UT Medical Center, 55 Medical Circle, Austin, Texas 78750.
You are writing to the Medical Review Board, Austin Diagnostic Medical Center, 12221 Mopac Expressway, Austin, Texas 78758 to propose the development of a guidebook on hypothyroidism in adults for those who have been recently diagnosed with the disease.
Here’s the text of the cover letter (watch for book or journal titles to italicize and a comma splice):
Enclosed is a proposal for an informative guide regarding hypothyroidism in adults, as requested in the Austin Medical Times. This proposal contains background information, a tentative outline of the guide, graphics, and the estimated cost of productions. Also included is the list of sources used for information on this disease. Thank you for your time and consideration, I look forward to the prospect of working with you. Please feel free to contact me with any questions or comments at (000)-000-0000.
Start the proposal proper at the top of a secondpage,with atitle (watch out for titles and a missing introductory element comma):
The following is a proposal, as requested in the advertisement in the Austin Medical Times, to write an informative guide about hypothyroidism in adults for patients recently diagnosed. This proposal contains background information, a tentative outline of its contents, and the costs and charges estimated for the production of this much needed guide. It will contain diagrams and charts to help patients identify the location of the thyroid and the symptoms that are involved with hypothyroidism. Although it will contain technical information it will be easily read and understood by anyone with a standard eighth-grade reading level.
Here is the rest of the proposal; be sure to include appropriate headings as necesary (watch for wrong word of a similar-sounding pair, a missing apostrophe,and an incorrect comma in a compund predicate):
Diseases of the thyroid are not uncommon to the medical profession. Hypothyroidism effects approximately ten percent of Americans. It is something that is not brought to the publics attention like AIDS or various types of cancers are, even though it is a life-long battle. Until recently, hypothyroidism patients were not given an opportunity to become easily informed about their disease. With a guidebook, patients have a good start to understanding what is happening inside their body and cope with it openly. Hypothyroidism is an incurable disease, and needs to be treated with as much care and openness as any other disease.
Watch for a parallelism problemand capitalization problem in the following:
The guidebook will be written mainly for adult patients recently diagnosed with hypothyroidism. Explaining what hypothyroidism is, its symptoms, and how it is caused and treated will be the main points of the guidebook. It will have a few charts and diagrams to enhance understanding. The reader will not need to have any technical knowledge about the disease, only an eighth-grade reading level. The guidebook will be approximately ten pages long and include several easy to follow graphics and charts. The cover will be of heavy-weight paper. The guidebook will be center-folded and stapled. This offers most efficient production to fit the need. It will include information from various reputable sources such as the Thyroid Association and the Canadian Thyroid Society. Several Endocrinologists will also review various parts of the guidebook and have input on its documentation.The following is a working outline on how the guidebook will be set up. It shows the sections and details of the guidebook:
Format the following text as a traditional three-level outline (first-level items are punctuated with colons; second-level items with commas; third-level items with dashes); this outline contains one parallelism problem:
Introduction; Background: What is the thyroid, Definitions—Hypothyroidism, Hyperthyroidism—At-risk groups, Signs and symptoms, Self-examination; Causes: Thyroiditis, Genetics; Diagnosis and Tests: Thyroid-stimulating hormone (TSH), Serums—Thyroxine (T4), Triiodothyronine (T3)—Radioactive iodine, Imaging techniques—Scan, Sonogram—Needle biopsy; Treatments: Thyroid hormone pill, Radioactive iodine, Surgery, Adverse consequences—Drug affects, Cardiac conditions—Conclusion: Long-term follow-up, Why to keep in touch, Famous patients, Resources for help
The following is a list of the graphics that will be presented in the guidebook:
Format the following as a two-column table:
Throat (thyroid) area (diagram); Symptoms (diagram); Percentage affected with symptoms (table); Recommended screening tests (table)
The following is a projected schedule of this project:
Format the following also as a two-column table; fix the phrasing of the items that are not parallel in phrasing:
November 23, Starting research; November 23, Detailed outline sent for review; December 07, graphics produced; December 21, Finalize preliminary draft; December 28, Forward final copy forwarded; January 08, Deliver first shipment.
The initial cost of production will be as follows:
Also format the following as a two-column tables and include a total:
Write, edit, review (3,000); Develop graphics (1,000); Cover and binding (1,000); Duplicating (case of 1000) (4,000).
I have obtained a few sources for the guidebook thus far. More literature will be obtained from pamphlets and medical books. The following sources will provide the more specific details.
Make this a numbered list; fix the punctuation in some of these items and italicize titles correctly:
“Hypothyroidism” Stanford University. August 1995; <wwwmed.stanford.edu/schools/hypothyroidism.html. Accessed 1997, June 09.
B. Kearns,“Could it be your thyroid?”First for Women, July 1997.
"Patient Information". American Thyroid Association. April 1997; Accessed 1997, June 09.
“Patient Information”. Thyroid Home Page. 1997; < Accessed 1997, June 09.
M. Schachter, M.D, Health World Online- Hypothyroidism 1996; Accessed 1997, June 09.
Try to find a way to turnm this into a bulleted list for ease of scanning (watch for a missing introductory element comma, a missing apostrophe, and a capitalization error):
Not only am I one of the ten percent of Americans diagnosed with having hypothyroidism I am also a Research Technician for the University of Texas Medical Center. Having a diagnosis without any background information and lots of unanswered questions caused me to research the disease on my own. Once finding the answers, I found it easier to accept hypothyroidism and not let it run my life. Instead, I turned it around and found a start in my career in the medical field as a medical researcher. During the past two years, my work with the University of Texas Medical Center has included guidebooks on diabetes, hyperthyroid disease, and glaucoma. Knowledge, I believe, is crucial for every individual, especially when it comes to their health. Patients are not always given the information they need to understand what their doctors are diagnosing. Due to time restraints and/or unfamiliarity with certain subjects, patients sometimes leave the doctors office with uncertainty. Patients may not be able to retain and process all the information that is given to them and are therefore not able to ask the "right" questions. This guidebook will help ease the adult patients into understanding their Hypothyroidism diagnosis. Informing the patient by using a standard guide alleviates doctors of explaining the details of the disease, yet lets the doctor feel comfortable with the patient leaving the office. It also puts some of the "power" in the hands of the patient. With a bit of understanding, Hypothyroidism patients no longer need to be afraid of the diagnosis or treatment. With this in mind, I hope you realize that we here at the University of Texas Medical Center are professional individuals with one common goal—to inform the public the best we can. Writing this guidebook brings us one step closer.