PNNF – Sensory Details and writing out scenes (WEDNESDAY’s Class)

*Choose a scene to write out while using SENSORY DETAILS!

Touch, taste, smell, sight, sound. (You don’t have to use ALL of the 5 senses…) How parts

of the story felt, looked, tasted, smelled, What you heard or what things sounded like….

* YOU ARE DESCRIBING WHAT HAPPENED IN EACH SCENE/EACH PART OF YOUR MEMORY. Stay away from EVER using ‘Then’ or ‘So’at the beginning of a sentence.

THESE ARE SUMMARY WORDS!

Ms. G’s Story -- FOOD FIGHT IN GRADE 4:

Introduction / Rising Action / Climax / Falling Action / Resolution
Joining the lunch table with Nick and Chuck, being peer pressured to start a food fight. / Letting my crush on Nick convince me to join in and discuss strategy. / Throwing the tuna sandwich, with everyone joining in. / The lunch lady dragging me to the Principal’s office and getting suspended. / Walking home, telling my Mum I started the food fight and got suspended, and getting in trouble for wasting my sandwich.

Scene written out in Sensory Details –

Ms. G’s INTRODUCTION example:

I ran into the lunchroom and saw Nick and Chuck at a table. I sat next to them and we all opened our bag lunches. Kids around us were already scarfing down their food. The quicker you ate, the quicker you got to go outside to play. This is when Nick suggested that we start a food fight. Both Nick and Chuck’s eyes got wide at the idea. They kept looking at me, hoping I would agree to start it. The cool thing to do would be to say yes. They kept reminding me that they’d join in.

Ms. G’s CLIMAX example:
I launched my tuna fish sandwich and it soared through the air, smacking some kid on the side of the head. Nick and Chuck immediately joined into the fun. You could hear kids yelling from every corner of the lunchroom. Cheese slices, half-eaten apples and bread flew through the air. The mixture of all kinds of food gave the room a rotten smell. I was getting pegged everywhere on my body, but I was also laughing and throwing whatever I found in front of me, right back. Screams from students being pelted pierced my ears but everything and everyone seemed fair game. This was officially a food fight.

Classwork:*Choose 2-3 scenes to WRITE OUT, ONLY WITH SENSORY DETAILS.

[Do not yet add Dialogue, Inner Thinking or Sentence structures…]

If you feel like the writing of a Scene is filled with details, go onto writing another scene.

You may pick the order from your Story Mountain to start writing out your scenes.

THURS/FRI Class:

~All 5 scenes need to be written out~
Remember to be using Sensory Details (What did things look like, what did you hear, how did things feel, what did things taste like or smell like).

YOU ARE DESCRIBING WHAT HAPPENED IN EACH SCENE/EACH PART OF YOUR MEMORY.Remember NOT to start a sentence with ‘Then ‘ or ‘So’!

Ms. G’s Example 

Falling Action:

I was in full food fight mode when I felt a hand on my shoulder. The lunch lady I had tried to avoid grabbed me. She dragged me out of seat and shoved me out of the lunchroom door, up to the main office. I had to go inside the Principal’s office, where Mr. Proctor just sat in his chair, staring at me. My legs were shaking with nerves but I didn’t let it show. He asked if I started the food fight and I quickly denied it. He asked again and I continued to lie. It’s possible that you could see the sweat on my forehead. He shared that the student that I hit in the head with my tuna sandwich had told on me. There was no amount of excuses that could get me out of this situation. Mr. Principal handed me a suspension letter and shared his disappointment. He demanded that I go home immediately.

Homework:
Finish writing all 5 Sensory-Detailed Scenes from your Story Mountain. (JUST DETAILS, not Inner Thinking or Dialogue yet)

Due: Monday/Tuesday