Your Last Name 1
John Smith
Mrs. Curley
English 10 Honors
15 June 2015
Type your engaging title here (same font as everything else- no quotations, italics, underlining):
Your* paper starts here: you* are all going to wow me* with a brilliant interpretation of one chosen piece of art, with careful, insightful research on its painter, and with a significant effort to relate this all back to George Orwell’s dystopian novel 1984 in multiple body paragraphs. The font throughout this typed paper of at least six pages is double-spaced, 12 pt. font, Times New Roman. Also, notice the margins are set to one inch. Create interest in your topic, especially in your* first sentence or two. Please remember to include the following elements in the introductory paragraph: the artist and title of one painting you* have chosen, the title of the author and book being discussed, and a glimpse into the points to be discussed in your* upcoming body paragraphs. Your* introduction is one of the most important parts of your* paper because it gives me* an idea of how the rest of your* paper will read. Keep in mind: when I* read your thesis statement, I* should be able to tell what will be the basic ideas of your body paragraphs. A solid thesis statement includes three points to be discussed, which then lays out a logical structure to follow as you* write. The next sentence would be the thesis statement since it is the last sentence. Remember, the thesis statement is the last sentence of the first paragraph.
This is the first body paragraph where you* could discuss the artist and will soon start using parenthetical in-text citations, direct quotes, etc. The due date for this paper is set firm for Monday, June 15, the last day of attendance during official class time. Please read the following carefully to be sure that your paper is submitted on time. This paper is graded out of 100 points and counts for 10% of your grade for the year. To be considered on time and avoid an immediate deduction of 20 pts per day, papers must meet all of these conditions: be submitted onto by 7 AM on the morning of Monday, June 15th AND a stapled identical hard copy with rubric and sources must be brought to class during the class period you will see me that same day. NO EXCEPTIONS OR EXTENSIONS WILL BE MADE EVEN IN THE EVENT OF ABSENCE FROM SCHOOL. To be expressly clear: electronic copies of papers must be submitted on , AND an identical hard copy must be submitted directly to me during class time on MONDAY, JUNE 15th. Failure to comply with all said conditions will result in an immediate 20 pt. deduction. If you are not in attendance, an electronic and hard copy must still be provided by the deadline. Feel free to hand papers in on Friday, June 12th! Papers must be stapled before coming to class to avoid penalty. Do not involve me in technical difficulties regarding the submission of your final paper onto turnitin.com. An electronic copy of the original instruction sheet is on the class website.
*Why do these words have an asterisk next to them?- They are 1st & 2nd person pronouns.
You are not to use 1st or 2nd person pronouns in any sort of formal, academic essay.
First-person pronouns:
I, we, me, us, my/mine, our/ours
Second-person pronouns:
You, you, yours
Also, be sure to not use contractions. Write about the plot of 1984 and your chosen artwork using the present tense. Finally, do not use slangy or overused, lame, conversational words as in good, bad, like, sorta, a lot, stuff, things, great, “the reason being”, etc. Even the word “very” is lame. (Why?)
A Word on Transitions
Make sure your paragraphs do no end abruptly. One way to avoid this is to use transitions, which should be present.
To Add: and, again, and then, besides, equally important, finally, further, furthermore, nor, too, next, lastly, what's more, moreover, in addition, first (second, etc.)
To Compare: whereas, but, yet, on the other hand, however, nevertheless, on the contrary, by comparison, where, compared to, up against, balanced against, vis a vis, but, although, conversely, meanwhile, after all, in contrast, although this may be true
To Prove: because, for, since, for the same reason, furthermore, moreover, besides, indeed, in fact, in addition, that is
To Show Exception: yet, still, however, nevertheless, in spite of, despite, of course, once in a while, sometimes
To Show Time: immediately, thereafter, soon, after a few hours, finally, then, later, previously, formerly, first (second, etc.), next, and then
To Emphasize:definitely, extremely, obviously, in fact, indeed, in any case, absolutely, positively, naturally, surprisingly, always, forever, perennially, eternally, never, emphatically, unquestionably, without a doubt, certainly, undeniably, without reservation
To Show Sequence:after, afterward, subsequently, finally, consequently, previously, before this, simultaneously, concurrently, thus, therefore, hence, next, and then, soon
To Give an Example:for example, for instance, in this case, in another case, on this occasion, in this situation, take the case of, to demonstrate, to illustrate, as an illustration, to illustrate
Now, as you get set to establish connection between the one artwork of your choice and 1984, be mindful of the following phrasings:
•Intriguing parallels can be found in both Orwell’s and Dali’s work. For example,….
•The ----- in Picasso’s The Old Guitarist is comparable to ----- in Orwell’s 1984. (3 points which will then become main ideas to be developed in body paragraphs)**.
•The themes of ------in Van Gogh’s Starry Night are reflected similarly in the ______(adj) experiences of Orwell’s protagonist Winston Smith. **
Sample Outline:
I. Introduction
Thesis: ______
II. Main Idea I
A. Supporting Detail 1
1. Detail 1
2. Detail 2
3.Quotation (Think: ICE)
B. Supporting Detail 2
1. Detail 1
2. Detail 2
3.Quotation (Think: ICE)
III. Main Idea II (Repeat steps)
1. Detail 1
a. further detail 1
b. further detail 2
2. Detail 2
3.Quotation (Think: ICE)
IV. Main Idea III
V. Conclusion (well-developed!)
MLA formatting: In-text citations, or citations within body paragraphs
Body paragraphs should contain a mix of direct and indirect quotes drawn from sources listed on the Works Cited page.
Here is an example of a direct quote from 1984:
“He wondered, as he had many times before, whether he himself might be a lunatic” (Orwell 80).
It is a direct quote since I pulled it directly from Orwell’s novel, and I did not paraphrase it, or put it in my own words.
Direct quotes from 1984 are required to develop your ideas. If you make a point about Winston that you wish to emphasize, why not use a direct quite from 1984 to make your writing more sophisticated?
- Be sure to introduce all direct quotes. Do not begin a sentence with a direct quote.
Example: Winston’s fragile mental state is illustrated at great length before and after his capture. As the narration indicates, “He had many times wondered before, whether he himself might be a lunatic.” (Orwell 80). Here you should then develop this direct quotation further: What does it mean? Why is it important? (After all, it must be important if you chose to include it in your paper).
- Do not write: This quote shows or This quote means. This is a common mistake. A quote cannot really ‘mean’ or ‘show’ anything. Your original explanation of a quote ‘shows’ the reader something.
- Direct quotations always need to have an in-text citation!
Here is an example of an indirect quote from 1984:
Winston questions his sanity numerous times.
It is an indirect quote since it is not pulled verbatim, or word for word, from the novel. I put it into my own words. Do not provide an in-text citation for your own paraphrased ideas about 1984 or plot references.
Keep in mind: If the ideas or words about the book, the artist, or the painting are not your own original ideas, then you must provide an in-text citation using parentheses at the end of that sentence.
Bottom line: If you type up an idea that is not yours, then it needs to be cited even if you paraphrased it. When in doubt, just cite. (Do not cite 1984 background knowledge).
You will not use block quotes, or direct quotations of more than four lines in your paper.
Depending on what types of source is being used, in-text citations within your body paragraphs will vary.
The most basic in-text citation will include (author’s last name + page number). Things get can get tricky, though, especially with online sources and especially if a source does not have a specific author listed.
In-text citations for electronic sources with no known author
- When an electronic source has no known author, use a shortened title of the work instead of an author name. Place the title in quotation marks if it's a short work (such as an article) or italicize it if it's a longer work (e.g. plays, books, television shows, entire Web sites) and provide a page number if it is available. Note that many Internet articles will not have an actual page number. Do not make up page numbers!
Sometimes writers are confused with how to craft parenthetical citations for electronic sources because of the absence of page numbers, but often, these sorts of entries do not require any sort of parenthetical citation at all. For electronic and Internet sources, follow the following guidelines:
Include in the text only the first item that will appear in the Work Cited entry (e.g. author name, article name, website name).
Example: (“Techniques of Picasso During the Blue Period”)-If no author is given, this would appear in the body of the paper AND as the first piece of information for this source listed on the Works Cited page.
Do not include URLs (long website addresses) in-text. Only provide partial URLs such as when the name of the site includes, for example, a domain name, like CNN.com or Forbes.com as opposed to writing out or (You would only do this if the source did not have an actual author or page number listed).
One last word:
-When citing for one sentence, the period goes after the parenthetical notation. The notation is part of that sentence, so it only applies to that one sentence.
-When citing for multiple sentences, the period goes before the parenthetical notation and applies to every uncited sentence before it.
Useful source to help w/ in-text citations:
MLA formatting- Works Cited page
The Works Cited page is the last page of your paper. It is basically a list of all the sources you used to help write your final essay.
Your Works Cited pages must list a citation for the following sources:
1.1984
2. The one artwork you chose to write about all throughout your paper
3. Reputable secondary sources of your choice that are related to your artwork and/or artist. You are required to use a minimum of three.
Wikipedia and about.com cannot be used as sources.
You, then, will list at least 5 sources on your original Works Cited page.
Keep in mind that these sources listed on the Works Cited page would have been used in the paper as part of in-text citations- the information used in parentheses within your body paragraphs.
****Most online databases will actually provide you with the MLA citation format; all you have to do is click on the “citation” or “cite” “MLA citation” or “how to cite this article” link, and you can simply cut and paste how the citation should be listed on your Works Cited page.
Useful websites to help with Works Cited page issues:
- Begin your Works Cited page on a separate page at the end of your research paper. It should have the same one-inch margins, font type and last name, page number header as the rest of your paper.
- Label the page Works Cited (do not italicize the words Works Cited or put them in quotation marks) and center the words Works Cited at the top of the page.
- Double space all citations, but do not skip spaces between entries.
- Indent the second and subsequent lines of each listed citation by 0.5 inches to create a hanging indent.
- For every entry, you must determine the Medium of Publication. Most entries will likely be listed as Print or Web sources, but other possibilities may include Film, CD-ROM, or DVD.
- Writers are no longer required to provide URLs for Web entries. However, if your instructor or publisher insists on them, include them in angle brackets after the entry and end with a period. For long URLs, break lines only at slashes. (*I am not requiring that you include URLs*).
Works Cited
MacDONALD, HARRIS, and MacDonald Harris's most recent novel, "Glowstone" (Morrow), includes a fictional scene set,inGiverny. "Giverny, as Monet Painted it and Lived it." New York Times: A.14. Aug 30 1987. ProQuest.Web. 2 June 2013.
Monet, Claude. Meadow with Haystacks at Giverny. 1885. Museum of Fine
Arts, Boston.ARTstor.Web. 22 October 2004.
Orwell, George. 1984. New York: Penguin, 1949. Print.
Vogel, Carol. "Revealing the Monet of Pencil and Paper."New York Times: 0. Jan 17 2007. ProQuest.Web. 2 June 2013.
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Notice a few things about the above Works Cited example:
1. The citations for each source are listed alphabetically.
2. The second line of each citation is indented five spaces to create what is called a ‘hanging indent.’
3. Electronic (Internet) sources include two dates: the date of publication and the date in which the user viewed it.
4. The first word for each citation must match what is contained in the parenthesis for that source at the end of your sentences in your body paragraphs.
Note that the above example, though, only list two secondary sources.
*Notice that this Works Cited contains a header with surname and page number. Your own Works Cited page will most likely contain the number 8,9,10 since you must write a minimum of six full-length pages of text. (I recommend reaching the seventh page). The Works Cited page does not count in meeting the minimum page-length requirement.
Works Cited
"Title of Article."Britannica School.Encyclopædia Britannica, Inc., 2014. Web. 10 Jun.
2014.
"Jackson Pollock." Britannica School.Encyclopædia Britannica, Inc., 2014. Web. 11 Jun. 2014.
Orwell, George. 1984. New York: Penguin, 1949. Print.
Pollock, Jackson. Lavender Mist (Number 1).1950. National Gallery of Art, Washington, D.C.
National Gallery of Art.Web. June 10, 2014.
Zambri, Frances Henry. “Pollock Unpacked.” The Independent. Independent Digital
News and Media, October 22, 1995. Web. June 11, 2014.
Photo Critique Essay Checklist
Introduction
Introduces painting and painter- Title of painting is italicized. Year of composition is included.
Introduces author and novel- George Orwell’s dystopian novel 1984 (TAG)
Thesis Statement: Identifies three points to be discussed in body paragraphs.
Overall, ideas are presented in a clear and engaging manner.
First Body Paragraph
Topic sentence is strong, clear, present, and related to thesis statement.
Explains relevant information about the artist. Do not just provide random information and a detailed biography about the artist’s life. You are required to somehow make a connection between the artist’s life, the painting, and 1984.
Information is cited properly.
Second Body Paragraph
Topic sentence is strong, clear, present, and related to thesis statement.
Explains the painting, making analytical reference to color, angles, shapes, etc.
Uses an art source. Information is cited properly.
Establishes the connection between 1984 and the painting in an analytical way.
All other body paragraphs
Topic sentence is strong, clear, present, and related to thesis statement.
Sentence variety is used throughout.
Sentence variety is achieved.
Sentences are punctuated properly.
Citations are proper
Grammar, Mechanics, and Miscellaneous
Grammar, spelling, and sentence do not distract the reader from the content
Vocabulary, language, mechanics, and tone are sophisticated. First and second person pronouns and contractions are not used. The plot of 1984 and the artwork are discussed using present tense.
All of the evidence and examples from research and from 1984 are specific and relevant, and explanations are given that show how each piece of evidence supports the author's position.Relevant plot points and quotations from 1984 are used in a compelling manner
A variety of thoughtful transitions are used to avoid abrupt shifting between paragraphs. Transitions clearly show how ideas are connected.
Quotes are used effectively and help support the paper. Quotations from 1984 must be present and cited. All ideas- both direct and indirect quotes (paraphrased ideas)- are cited using parenthetical citations at the ends of sentences.
Conclusion
Restates thesis in an engaging way
Explains again how the painter and the author connect using varied language
Concludes paper in an engaging manner- thesis is not just ‘cut and pasted’
Paper reaches desired length of a minimum of six pages of text. Papers less than a full six pageswill be heavily penalized. Do not count the Works Cited page as part of this page length requirement.
MLA formatting
Title of paper contains a subtitle and is engaging
MLA Heading is proper.
Header on each page is proper (Jones 1, Jones 2, etc)
In-text citation (within the body of the paper) is proper. Do not begin a sentence with a direct quote; introduce it!
12 TNR, double spacing
No cover page
*Works Cited page is included at the back of paper and achieves the following results:
Listing of sources is alphabetical
Sources listed include: three outside sources, most likely from library databasesas demonstrated during Mrs. McAvoy’sprevious visit + 1984 + artwork (about.com and Wikipedia are not permitted)
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Hanging indents are used for citations that are more than one line long.(2nd line of entry is moved in 5 spaces or half inch).
Double-spaced just like body paragraphs- do not skip lines!