Writing the Personal Statement

The personal statement is the opportunity to marketskills, training, experiences, etc. in the application process and generally falls into one of two categories:

1. The general, comprehensive personal statement: This allows maximum freedom in terms of what can be written and is the type of statement often prepared for standard medical or law school application forms.

2. The response to very specific questions: Often, business and graduate school applications ask specific questions, and the statement should respond specifically to the questions asked.

Questions that may help students brainstorm for the letter:

  • What's special, unique, distinctive, and/or impressive about you or your life story?
  • What details of your life (personal or family problems, history, people or events that have shaped you or influenced your goals) might help the committee better understand you or help set you apart from other applicants?
  • When did you become interested in this field and what have you learned about it (and about yourself) that has further stimulated your interest and reinforced your conviction that you are well suited to this field? What insights have you gained?
  • How have you learned about this field—through classes, readings, seminars, work or other experiences, or conversations with people already in the field?
  • If you have worked a lot during your college years, what have you learned (leadership or managerial skills, for example), and how has that work contributed to your growth?
  • What are your career goals?
  • Are there any gaps or discrepancies in your academic record that you should explain (great grades but mediocre LSAT or GRE scores, for example, or a distinct upward pattern to your GPA if it was only average in the beginning)?
  • Have you had to overcome any unusual obstacles or hardships (for example, economic, familial, or physical) in your life?
  • What personal characteristics (for example. integrity. compassion. persistence) do you possess that would improve your prospects for success in the field or profession? Is there a way to demonstrate or document that you have these characteristics?
  • What skills (for example, leadership, communicative, analytical) do you possess?
  • Why might you be a stronger candidate for graduate school—and more successful and effective in the profession or field than other applicants?
  • What are the most compelling reasons you can give for the admissions committee to be interested in you?

General Advice

Answer the questions that are asked-- be sure the answer fits the question being asked.

Be specific-- Don't, for example, claim that you would make an excellent doctor unless you can back it up with specific reasons. Your desire to become a lawyer, engineer, or whatever should be logical, the result of specific experience that is described in your statement. Your application should emerge as the logical conclusion to your story.

Be interesting!!! Use an anecdote to hook interest!-- One of the worst things you can do is to bore the admissions committee. Make the statement fresh, lively, and different.If you're like most people, your life story lacks drama, so figuring out a way to make it interesting becomes the big challenge. Finding an angle or a "hook" is vital.

Concentrate on your opening paragraph-- The lead or opening paragraph is generally the most important. It is here that you grab the reader's attention or lose it. This paragraph becomes the framework for the rest of the statement. Tell a story -- show through concrete experience.

Demonstrate that you are knowledgeable about the program and your career choice -- detail your interest and experience in your particular field, as well as some of your knowledge of the field. Too many people graduate with little or no knowledge of the nuts and bolts of the profession or field they hope to enter. Be as specific as you can in relating what you know about the field and be explicit in explaining what you plan to learn from the program and how that is crucial to your career plans.

Write well and correctly-- be meticulous. Type and proofread the essay very carefully. Many admissions officers say that good written skills and command of correct use of language are important to them as they read these statements. Express yourself clearly and concisely. Adhere to stated word limits.

Avoid clichés-- an applicant who writes that he or she is good at science and wants to help other people does not express an original thought. Stay away from often-repeated or tired statements.

Show how you are unique -- Distinguish yourself through yourstory and make yourself memorable. Graduate programs seek unique students that can in turn contribute to their program.

Avoid some topics – omit references to experiences or accomplishments in high school or earlier. Don't mention potentially controversial subjects (for example, controversial religious or political issues).

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Advice from Admissions Representatives

  1. Poorly written essays are a bad reflection on the applicant.
  1. Don't over-elaborate; we're reading a lot of these kinds of essays. Also, don't be too brief or superficial. We like to have major ideas presented well.
  1. Everyone tries to make himself or herself the perfect law school applicant who, of course, does not exist and is not nearly as interesting as a real human being.
  1. Explain errors or weaknesses in their background. Even though we might wish to admit a student, sometimes we can't in view of a weakness that they haven't made any effort to explain. For example, perhaps they haven't told us that they were ill on the day that they took the LSAT or had an automobile accident on the way. Such things are legitimate reasons for poor performance. We understand that life is tough sometimes. We need to know what happened, for example, to cause a sudden drop in the GPA.
  1. What we're looking for is somebody who, in their personal statement, stands out as being so unusual, so diverse, that they're extremely attractive as a law student for the first-year class. Maybe what's going to make them distinctive is the fact they spent six months living in a log cabin in Alaska. Give the law school some justification for admitting you. With a lot of people, there's nothing that's going to make them distinctive. If that's the case, they've got to recognize that, indeed, the essay is not going to make that much difference here at UCLA.
  1. Applicants make a mistake by doing a lot of speculation about what they're going to do in the future rather than telling us about what they've done in the past. It is our job to speculate, and we are experienced at that.
  1. Applicants also tend to state and not evaluate. They give a recitation of their experience but no evaluation of what effect that particular experience had on them, no assessment of what certain experiences or honors meant.
  1. Tell us why you are unique, why we should admit you. The premise is that 9 out of 10 people who apply to medical school are very qualified. Why you?
  1. If applicants start every sentence on a whole page with "I," it gets to be a little bit too much.

Personal Statement: Top 10 Rules and Pitfalls

Top 10 Rules
  1. Strive for depth rather than breadth. Narrow focus to one or two key themes, ideas or experiences
  2. Try to tell the reader something that no other applicant will be able to say
  3. Provide the reader with insight into what drives you
  4. Be yourself, not the 'ideal' applicant
  5. Get creative and imaginative in the opening remarks, but make sure it's something that no one else could write
  6. Address the school's unique features that interest you, but don’t waste space “praising” the school
  7. Focus on the affirmative in the personal statement; consider an addendum to explain deficiencies or blemishes
  8. Evaluate experiences, rather than describe them
  9. Proofread carefully for grammar, syntax, punctuation, word usage, and style
  10. Use readable fonts, typeface, and conventional spacing and margins
Writing the Personal Statement: Top 10 Pitfalls
  1. Do not submit an expository resume; avoid repeating information found elsewhere on the application
  2. Do not complain or whine about the "system" or circumstances in your life
  3. Do not preach to your reader. You can express opinions, but do not come across as fanatical or extreme
  4. Do not talk about money as a motivator
  5. Do not discuss your minority status or disadvantaged background unless you have a compelling and unique story that relates to it
  6. Do not remind the school of its rankings or tell them how good they are
  7. Do not use boring clichéd intros or conclusions
  8. "Allow me to introduce myself. My name is..."
  9. "This question asks me to discuss..."
  10. "I would like to thank the admissions committee for considering my application."
  11. "It is my sincere hope that you will grant me the opportunity to attend your fine school."
  12. "In sum, there are three reasons why you should admit me..."
  13. Do not use unconventional and gimmicky formats and packages
  14. Do not submit supplemental materials unless they are requested
  15. Do not get the name of the school wrong
  16. Do not incorporate technical language or very uncommon words

Stewart, Mark Alan. Perfect Personal Statements. New York: Simon & Schuster Macmillan, 1996.

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