Part D: Edit the Piece Below As If It Were Submitted As a First Draft

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PART D: EDIT THE PIECE BELOW AS IF IT WERE SUBMITTED AS A FIRST DRAFT

This year, the Highlands bowling team walked into winter sports signups with reservations not caused by the members their lack of a coach. “Last year, we bowlers were a perfect definition of a team. We all enjoyed each other and bowling very much, and hoped that the next few years would be even better. But because of the coach change, many seasoned bowlers are worried that that could all change,” said Tasha Nelson, girls’ bowling captain. Ms. April Millian, the bowling coach for the 2004-2005 season, had left her job as a Northern Highlands math teacher and her position as bowling coach had to be filled with somebody else.

At the time of signups, the athletics department had hired Amy Pasernack as the new bowling coach. Bowlers were expecting to see their new coach at tryouts on November 14 but were shocked to find that once again, their coach would have to change. “Ms. Pasternack received a promotion at her full time job four days prior to the start of the bowling season,” said Robert Williams, Dean of Student Activities. “She said that she would be unable to fulfill the coaching requirements.”

Later that week at the Board of Education Meeting, Mike Saffran, a science teacher and soccer coach at Highlands, was approved to be the new head coach for bowling. However, due to schedule conflicts with the soccer program, he was unable to attend tryouts. On those 3 days, Williams and John Gornell, a Highlands history teacher, accompanied the team.

Since starting his position as head coach, Saffran has enlisted the help of Patrick Noto, a peer on the soccer staff at Highlands. Togethor, they are hoping to take the bowling team to a new level. “We have two goals for the team this year, both individually and as a team,” said Saffran. “As individuals, we need to always improve ourselves and become more consistent, and as a team become more competitive in the NBIL.” But Saffran has other goals that go beyond success in the bowling alley. “Coach Noto and I want to develop more awareness of the bowling program at Highlands. I’ve gone up to many people that had no clue that bowling was a varsity sport, or that there was a bowling team in the first place. I feel that that’ s just as important as winning matches.”

PART E: DESCRIBE HOW YOU WOULD RESPOND TO THE FOLLOWING SITUATION

Your star columnist, Robbie Rotgut, is focusing on the Highlands co-ed cricket team for the upcoming issue. He has uncovered a history of eating disorders with the girls on the team. He interviewed the following sources for the article: three anonymous girl cricket players, each of whom confirmed that they had witnessed or dealt with eating disorders, one boy player, and the assistant coach, each of whom denied that there were any issues with eating disorders. The columnist, in his first draft, while quoting the denials of the boy player and the assistant coach, sides with the girls, making a case that the cricket team should pay more attention to the problem of eating disorders. What do you advise your columnist to do next?