Here Is a Paragraph. It Is Not Bad. but It Could Be Improved by Changing a Few Weak Verbs

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Here is a paragraph. It is not bad. But it could be improved by changing a few weak verbs.

The Volkswagen is unexcelled for dependability. It is well behaved under driving conditions under driving conditions in which other cars are kept off the road. Unlike conventional cars with their engines over the front wheels, the VW engine is in the back, which gives superior traction to the rear wheels. As a result, the VW can climb steep, slippery hills with ease or it can go with sureness through ice snow, mud and sand. Furthermore, other cars are easily outperformed by the VW even under the most extreme temperature conditions because there are no radiator problems in the VW. The VW engine is air cooled, thus there are no leaks, rust or antifreeze problems particular to conventional cars. Any time, summer or winter, day or night, the VW is ready to go anywhere.

Quick Exercise

In today’s fast paced modern world, finding out the true facts in foreign affairs and business is becoming increasingly difficult.

I am writing for the purpose of updating our information. Would you be kind enough to give this matter your full attention and consideration?

It is the belief of everyone who was involved that during the time that we were away someone broke in for the purpose of robbery, despite the fact that we had taken full and complete precautions.

I would like you to obtain for me a duplicate copy of the invoice which is dated March 1, 2012.

Our expansion and modernization plans are proceeding on time, as scheduled.

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Unexcelled for dependability, the Volkswagen behaves well under driving conditions that frighten other cars off the road. Unlike conventional cars with their engines over the front wheels, the VW, with its engine weight in the back of the car, delivers superior rear wheel traction. As a result, the VW climbs steep, slippery hills with ease or cruises securely through ice snow, mud and sand. Further, the VW outperforms other cars even under the most extreme temperature conditions because it needs no radiator. The air cooled engine thus develops no leaks, rust or antifreeze problems particular to conventional cars. Any time, summer or winter, day or night, the VW stands ready for anything.

Quick Exercise

1. Uncovering the truth in foreign affairs and business is becoming difficult.

1. Could you please updating our information?

1. We were robbed while away even though we took all the necessary precautions.

1. Please get me a copy of the invoice dated March 1, 2012.

1. Our expansion and modernization plans are proceeding on schedule.