Exercises in incorporating quotations in papers
Author: Laurie Wolfley
Revised: Mary Heckman
Last updated: July 9, 2013
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Please revise the following excerpts from papers on Shakespeare’s The Tempest to respond to the instructor’s comments:
It “is the poorest nation in the Americas” (Winn[1] 283).
The limited information unearthed was the following , “… the formation and maintenance of what be called an ideology of particular groupings of scientists” (Robbins and Johnson 362) is a focus of a study for which “There has been relatively little empirical investigation … studies of American psychiatrists have identified… conflicting ideologies within psychiatry, based on whether the problems of the mentally ill are seen as being of physical, psychological, or social origin… the socio-therapeutic ideology appears to be much less well developed. Strauss found that differences in ideological position could be related to differences in training, in links with professional organizations, and in occupational situation in different institutions[2].” (Robbins and Johnson 362).
Thus, Prospero uses magic and other deceit to teach the passengers a lesson. Prospero rejoices at what his powers have done in act 3:
Bravely the figure of this Harpy hest thou
Performed, my Ariel. A grace it had, devouring.
Of my instruction hast thou nothing bated
In what thou hadst to say. So, with good life
And observation strange, my meaner ministers
Their several kinds have done. My high charms
Work,
And these mine enemies are all knit up
In their distractions. They are now in my power;
And in these fits I leave them while I visit
Young Ferdinand, whom they supposed is drowned
And his and mine loved darling. (117)
He is saying that [3]everyone is now under his power.
Gonzalo for instance is commonly praised throughout the play by [4]Prospero “O good Gonzalo, my true preserver and loyal sir…” [5](Shakespeare, 5, 1, 77).
Having caused a storm that has shipwrecked some new inhabitants, Prospero exercises control over his daughter and then carefully crafts a courtship for her with the young Ferdinand. Prospero curtly tells Miranda, “Here cease more questions. Thou are inclined to sleep. ‘Tis a good dullness, and give it way. I know thou canst not choose” (Act 1, Scene 2, Line 219-221, 25)[6].
Stephano responds to this plot by saying, “I will kill this man. His daughter and I will be king and queen-and Triculo and thyself shall be viceroys.-Dost thou like the plot, Trinculo?” (3.2.116-119). [7]Trinculo responds, “Excellent” (3.2.120). [8]
He is even more valuable in that he knows where to find all of the food and other wonderful resources the island they’re trapped on has to offer, [9]“I prithee, let me bring thee where crabs grow, and I with my long nails will dig thee pignuts, show thee a jay’s nest, and instruct thee how to snare the nimblest marmoset.” (2, 2, 173-6).
Ariel reminds Prospero of his promise to set her free, reminding him that [10] “I have done thee worthy service, told thee no lies, made no mistakings, served without or grudge or grumblings” (1.2.295-96).
“Thou best know’st what torment I did find thee in. Thy groans did make wolves howl, and penetrate the breasts of angry bears. It was a torment to lay upon the damned, which Sycorax could not again undo. It was mine art…that…let thee out.” (1, 2, 340-7). Prospero reminds Ariel that he is responsible for her freedom and that she owes him everything.[11]
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[1] Who is this? What’s his expertise?
[2]If you’re going to keep this as a whole in your paper, it needs to be indented in the format of a long quote. Even better, though, would be taking out bits and pieces and incorporating them into your own text; that is, integrate the quote with the explanation.
[3]Is this necessary?
[4] passive
[5]Let’s work on more smoothly integrating these quotes into your explanations
[6]Why tell this story? Explain to the reader why you’re sharing this particular quote
[7]How can you integrate this more smoothly?
[8]Why add this?
[9]Can you introduce this quote more effectively, so that the quote flows from the introduction
[10]Let’s try to introduce this more smoothly, avoiding the pronoun conflict (Ariel=her=I). Perhaps simply integrate some of the quoted words or phrases into your own sentence
[11]This may come too late—and be a bit insufficient—to effectively guide the reader through the quote. I wasn’t even sure, when I first read it, who is speaking to whom.