Name of Paragraph Writer:______Peer Editing

Persuasive Paragraph

Step 1: Write your name above and pass this peer editing sheet and your paragraph to your left

Step 2: You are now editing as the format editor on someone else’s paper; write your name beside edited by, read carefully and in detail to make helpful suggestions.

Formatting Expert Edited By:

The paragraph has a proper header on it in the top left corner, with the student’s name, course code, teacher’s name and due date / yes no
There is a descriptive title showing a specific connection to the topic of the Paragraph. (eg. the paragraph is NOT titled, “English Persuasive Paragraph” or “Freaks and Geeks Persuasive Paragraph”). The title is NOT underlined, a larger font, or in bold. / yes no
There is pagination in the top right corner of each page with the student’s last name preceding it (eg. Smith 1) / yes no
The margins are 1 inch on every side / yes no
There is one (1) paragraph total / yes no
The paragraph is double-spaced / yes no
The paragraph is indented / yes no
12 point font and Times New Roman are used / yes no
Any mention of the text’s title is in quotation marks (eg. Judd Apatow“Freaks and Geeks”) / yes no
Any reference to the creator uses the first AND last name or just the last name only. (eg. Judd Apatow OR Apatow… NOT Judd) / yes no
The Works Cited is on a separate page from the last page of the persuasive paragraph. / yes no
It has a title at the top of the page: Works Cited - no bold, underline or larger font / yes no
It follows all of the guidelines on the MLA style handout for the Works Cited, including the alphabetization of the author’s works by the author’s last name / yes no
All print and electronic sources are listed in the interests of academic honesty. / yes no

Step 3: Pass this peer editing sheet and the paragraph to your left

Step 4: You are now the First Impression Expert on a completely new paper; write your name beside edited by, read carefully and in detail to make helpful suggestions.

First Impression ExpertEdited by:

The “hook” is interesting, creative and makes you want to read more / yes no
The “hook” is only 1 sentence / yes no
The thesis makes a clear argument (it is arguable and insightful, the thesis attempts to answer or point out the “so what”) / yes no
The thesis is only 1 sentence / yes no
The thesis includes the creator of the show (Judd Apatow) and the title of the show “Freaks and Geeks” / yes no
Evidence of engagement with audience (the reader is interested and wants to keep reading) / yes no
Make a suggestion either about their “hook” or thesis to improve the paragraph

Step 5: Pass this peer editing sheet with the paragraph to your left

Step 6: You are now the Content Expert on a completely new paper; write your name beside edited by, read carefully and in detail to make helpful suggestions.

Content ExpertEdited by:

Each point is clearly stated in 1 sentence (Point 1 and Point 2) / yes no
Each point is supported by evidence - an example of quotation from the text / yes no
The evidence connects well and proves the point and thesis / yes no
The evidence is provided in a concise and clear manner / yes no
The evidence has a phrase or lead that briefly introduces the proof and tied it seamlessly into the rest of the paragraph / yes no
Direct quotes have MLA citations following them (Episode#, year). / yes no
The analysis clearly and persuasively proves that the point and thesis are correct / yes no
The author uses at least one of the persuasive techniques learned in class in their analysis / yes no
The analysis is two (2) sentences for each point / yes no
The conclusion contains all of the features of the introduction in the reverse (restates the thesis and finishes with general statement) / yes no
It finishes with a compelling statement reminding us of the overall significance of the argument to the text and life in general / yes no
No new material or argumentation is introduced, in the conclusion / yes no
Do a word count (less than 300?) and place the total number of words on the right / words

Step 7: Pass this peer editing sheet with the paragraph to your left

Step 8: You are now the Conventions Expert on a completely new paper; write your name beside edited by, read carefully and in detail to make helpful suggestions.

Conventions ExpertEdited by:

Writes in complete sentences that communicate their meaning clearly and accurately, varying sentence type, structure and length / yes no
Makes logical transitions between ideas using transitional words and phrases / yes no
Effective diction/word choice used throughout - circle words that do not work well and make a helpful suggestion / yes no
Only uses third person (avoids personal pronouns - I, me my, we, us, you your etc) / yes no
Avoids using cliches, idioms or colloquialisms / yes no
The author does not use contractions (don’t, won’t, can’t, it’s, doesn’t, wouldn’t, they’re etc.) / yes no
Correct use of accuratespelling -circle words that are spelling incorrectly / yes no
Correct use of accurate grammar -subject-predicate agreements etc. - circle incorrect usages / yes no
Correct use of accurate punctuation, each sentence ends in an appropriate punctuation mark and is punctuated correctly in the middle - circle incorrect punctuation and add where needed / yes no

You are done! Yippie! Please return this editing sheet and the persuasive paragraph to its original owner so they may look over it.

Final Step: Please move your desks back to their correct places and work SILENTLY and INDEPENDENTLY on your paragraph for the rest of the period to make it better.