Year 10 formal writing format
Paragraph Structure for Year 10 Formal Writing
S E X A Y
Statement
Explanation (if it is not self-explanatory)[by this I mean]…..
eXample from your experience or imagination
Analysis of what is learned or demonstrated by this example
Your comment
This is the first paragraph from the essay topic:
We should all start using horses instead of driving cars in order to save the planet.
The first reason why it is completely ridiculous to suggest that we all start using horses instead of driving cars in order to save the planet is because the horses will destroy our environment in their own way. Imagine it: Horse poo everywhere! Yes, while horses don’t need filling with fossilised fuels and don’t belch greenhouse gasses into the air we breath, they do eat straw, grass and maybe - if they are very lucky – carrots. This all has to go somewhere, and it does: through the horse and under the tail to drop in huge clumps, many times a day. Our environment will become a stinking road dump; a haven only for blue bottle flies, and dogs looking for make-up. Take the Harbour Bridge and Queen Street for example. Overseas visitors, attracted to our “Keep New Zealand Green” tourist advertisements, will be shocked by how ‘green’ our key streets and glowing Harbour thoroughfare really are. They had come to see green paddocks and the rolling hills of Hobbiton, but no they get muck spraying up at them as they take the horse and cart Taxi down Queen Street to eat out at the Viaduct. As the taxi ascends the Harbour Bridge to visit the North Shore their driver has to dodge the poor poo picker-uppers as they work endlessly around the clock in shifts of 50 or more, to keep the poo from running off the bridge and fouling the pristine water of the Waitemata Harbour. Clearly, swapping cows for horses would be a step in the wrong direction if we are trying to save our planet: the impact down below the four-legged vehicle would be far more immediately damaging to our environment than the impact of car emissions on the heavens above. And “heavens above” is indeed what we would all be crying out as our ankles sank into green depths as we crossed the streets of Newmarket to do our Xmas shopping. It is simply ridiculous to suggest that we all start using horses for transport in order to save our planet. I would much prefer to choke on the odd exhaust fume than the stench of maggot-infested horse dung and its accompanying swarm.