A-ED-E-2 TV Violence
(1) I feel that violence in television programs should not be censored. (2) First of all censoring television violence removes the powerful impact of movies or shows. (3) If we, for instance, take out all the violence in a realistic war movie or television show. (4) We totally destroy the sense of correct imagery viewers create in their minds. (5) By censoring violence, we do not allow people to see for theirselves that war is horrible.
(6) Secondly, allowing censors to edit material from portions of television shows directly violate the freedom of expression of opinion given to any individual by the Constitution of the United States. (7) If we do that, our society will revolt and eventually our nation will turn into an anarchy. (8) Is anarchy what this nation is about?
(9) By censoring our television shows, the people’s right to news is taken away by us. (10) If certain portions of some news programs were edited. (11) Little would be left to show. (12) I would like to say that violence is a part of life and censoring it would do harm to our society.
- How should sentence 2 be corrected?
- change First of all to First of all,
- change violence to vilence
- change removes to remove
- change movies to movies,
- How should sentence 5 be corrected?
- change violence, to violence
- change we to us
- change theirselves to themselves
- change is to was
- How should sentence 6 be corrected?
- change Secondly, to Secondly;
- change shows to shows,
- change violate to violates
- change Constitution to constitution
- How should sentence 7 be corrected?
- change that, to that
- change will revolt to revolts
- change revolt to revolt,
- change eventually to eventually:
- How should sentence 9 be corrected?
- change By to Buy
- change shows, to shows
- change people’s to peoples
- change people’s right to news is taken away by us to we take away the people’s right to news
- How should sentences 3 and 4 be combined?
- If we, for instance, take out all the violence in a realistic war movie or television show; we totally destroy the sense of correct imagery viewers create in their minds.
- If we, for instance, take out all the violence in a realistic war movie or television show, we totally destroy the sense of correct imagery viewers create in their minds.
- If we, for instance, take out all the violence in a realistic war movie or television show (we totally destroy the sense of correct imagery viewers create in their minds.
- If we, for instance, take out all the violence in a realistic war movie or television show we totally destroy the sense of correct imagery viewers create in their minds.
- How should sentences 10 and 11 be combined?
- If certain portions of some news programs were edited; Little would be left to show.
- If certain portions of some news programs were edited, little would be left to show.
- If certain portions of some news programs were edited; little would be left to show.
- If certain portions of some news programs were edited little would be left to show.
- Which transition word best fits at the beginning of sentence 12?
- In conclusion,
- On the other hand,
- Primarily,
- By the way,
- Which sentence is a fragment?
- (1) I feel that violence in television programs should not be censored.
- (8) Is anarchy what this nation is about?
- (9) By censoring our television shows, the people’s right to news is taken away by us.
- (11) Little would be left to show.
- What is the author’s purpose in this passage?
- persuade
- criticize
- praise
- entertain